The day after ..

In the Reviews for 1, you guys asked me to lengthen the sex scene. Sadly, I wrote Chapter 2 before this story was validated, so your suggestions haven't happened yet. TRUST ME, you will enjoy Chapter 3 A LOT MORE. This is just filler so people will have something to read.

To answer a few reviews: I am NOT Jeremy. This is FICTION.

To the Reader who just said "shit..." thanks for the 'constructive' review. Ass.


Chapter 2


Author's Note: For those who don't know and don't care, or may get confused - 'Manga' is a Japanese-style comic book. 'Series' means that usually the manga is based on a different thing, like American comics (Batman, Superman, etc.) so 'Series' would be having every single book on a certain thing. It doesn't really matter if you understand this.


The next day was rather awkward on my end. Mom had taken us to the mall, so while she did her clothes shopping, I hit the bookstore for some manga, and Julie followed. As I walked down the aisle, seeing which series I had finished and which I hadn't, I felt something grab my hand. I turned to see Julie looking at me with a smirk on her face. I blushed, looking down to see that she had taken my hand, and was slowly running it up her body. I quickly jerked away, looking around.

"What if someone sees us? We'll be in deep shit." I said, Julie's expression not changing. She leaned in and kissed my cheek, rubbing her cheek against my neck.

"It'll be fine, we're alone in here … I think. Besides, I was just seeing if you remember last night … I know I sure do." She said, whispering a little incase someone was near. My face was still red as I walked a few steps away, looking at her.

"Well, I-" I was cut off by a louder voice - Mom had found us.

"Come on, I'm ready to go. Pick something out and let's go home."

The car ride home was just as uncomfortable as the mall - Usually, Mom looked back at us every few minutes for the hell of it, but today she kept focusing on the road, and Julie took notice. I tried to seem like I was too caught up in my book to care, but I could tell that she was planning something - I just wasn't sure what that something was. She looked over at me, smiling.

"Jeremy …" She whispered, a sound of mischief in her voice. I looked up, looking at her.

"What- Julie!" I whispered loudly, cut off by her hand now resting on my crotch, squeezing the area in an attempt to get me hard. My mind told me to push her off, but the pervert in me told me to enjoy it, so I did just that - I sighed in pleasure as my sister grabbed and played with my hardened dick through my jeans. Her grip became much harder, which made me get harder, and my orgasm was close. "Julie, I'm gonna-"

"We're home!" Mom said as the car stopped, and her door opened. Julie quickly moved her hand, getting out of the car as quickly as possible. I sighed, following the two girls as they went into the house. As Julie opened the front door, she turned around and gave me a seductive wink, licking her lips as she went inside. I followed, knowing exactly what was about to happen:

Every day at some point, Mom took a walk for exercise, and this usually took her a solid 20 to 30 minutes, giving Julie and myself plenty of time for another moment like last night. The logical side of me gave up completely, my dick overtaking my mind and commanding me to head upstairs.

"I'm going walking, don't burn the house down!" Mom yelled, obviously leaving. I listened for a moment, waiting on the door to shut - After I heard, I made my way to Julie's room, seeing the door closed. I took a deep breath, and knocked.

"Come in!" She said happily. I opened the door, and couldn't move another inch - She was completely nude, smiling at me, sitting on the edge of her bed. She stood up and grabbed my hand, pulling me closer and practically pushing me to the bed. "I have been craving this all damn day." She said as she quickly got my jeans unzipped and off, my boxers quickly following. She gave me a smirk as my hardened dick came out, standing straight up. She grabbed it, slowly jerking me off as she kept giving me that sexy look. "So how does this feel, brother of mine?"

"Really good ..." I slowly nodded, not wanting to sound like an idiot.

She smiled, moving her head down and kissing the head, licking it in a circle. Her tongue was so smooth and wet - It was like heaven just having it touch my body. She kept swirling her tongue around the head for a minute more, then moving her head to take every single inch in her mouth, moving her head up and down very slowly. I moaned softly as she moved, placing my hand on her head to make her move a little faster.

"Oh shit, Julie … This is amazing …" I moaned, pushing down on her head to have her take it all in again, holding her head there for a moment. She looked up at me, wrapping her tongue all over my hard dick as I held her there. I released her, and she quickly pulled away to catch her breath. She stood to the edge of the bed, looking down at my throbbing dick.

"Okay, Brother … Are you ready for me?" She asked, smirking. I quickly nodded, watching her stand on the bed and move over me, sitting down on my hard dick, taking it all inside of her tight, soaking pussy. She looked down, grabbing my hands and placing them on her large, slick breasts, slick from the sweat pouring down her body. I squeezed them firmly, rubbing my thumbs on the nipples. She closed her eyes, a small moan coming from her as I pinched and teased her tender nipples.

My hands moving to her sides, I grabbed her firmly and began to move her up and down, her wetness making it easy for her to ride me. I pulled her up, then back down over my dick slowly at first, speeding up after a few moans came from her. The sounds of our bodies together made small noises as I fucked my sister as fast as I could manage. After a few seconds, I finally sped up as fast as I could, causing her to scream with pleasure.

"Jeremy! Fuck me! Fuck me HARD!"

I smiled, pulling her up from me and pushing her down to her back, standing on my knees over her and grabbing her legs, pulling them apart. She looked up at me, smiling as I positioned myself over her, slamming my hard dick inside of her as deep as I could. I leaned down and put my mouth over her right nipple, sucking on it hard and keeping up my thrusting, moving faster and faster with every passing second.

"Jeremy! Yes! Fuck yes, I'm gonna cum!"

Her breasts were bouncing fast, and sweat was pouring down her as her screaming become louder, and her pussy tightened around my hard cock, causing me to move even faster - I was very close to cumming, and she knew it.

"Cum in me, Jeremy! Cum in me!"

With that last scream, I took one last thrust, feeling streams of hot cum fly from my dick, covering the inner walls of her pussy. At the same time, I felt her releasing as well - Her cum leaking out and covering the end of my dick as I pulled it out. We were both panting from lack of breath. She pulled me down on top of her, pressing her lips to mine and kissing me deeply, sliding her tongue into my mouth. Our tongues danced around each other, our kiss deepened for a moment before I pulled away.

"I love you, Julie." I said, smiling. She looked up at me, nodding.

"I love you too, Jeremy. We'll fuck again tonight, okay?" She said, winking. I blushed, quickly nodding.

"Okay … But I came inside, what if you get pregnant?" I asked. She shook her head, smiling.

"I started taking the pill a long time ago, we'll be just fine. I'll see you tonight, okay?" She said, moving out from under me and kissing my cheek. I smiled, standing and walking from the room and into my own, slamming the door closed.

I had just FUCKED my sister! Julie, the hottest girl I knew, my own sister, just had my cum shot into her!

AND she wanted it again tonight!

This was gonna be an amazing night …


3 WILL BE BETTER! Longer sex scenes, all that good stuff. It's halfway done.

Anonymous readerReport

2009-08-13 12:03:42
Your writing improved from the 2nd ,but you're still missing something in your story. For example you say 'it' to rephrase dick. Remember that in a story you need to write as if your audience is clueless. So, say what 'it' is and describe it. The more description you have the story becomes more realistic, it's hornier; but you need to know how to balance the two together.

Another matter I want to point out is when Jeremy and Julie were switching positions: what was jeremy's point of view? What did he see when he had Julie in that position. You need to become Jeremy, and stop being his spoke person.

But, like I said before your writing has improved and I'll let you off easy b/c you are a beginner. Not that being a beginner means you have no talent, because you do, it's just you need to take it over the top.

Try to make anyone horny when they read this story (lesbian, gay, bi-curious, bisexual,heterosexual, into animals, ect.)

Anonymous readerReport

2009-07-27 09:13:51
Also watch UFC 101 on the 8th
BJ Penn vs. Kenny florian
Forrest griffin vs. Anderson silva
Agh I fucken has nerds

Anonymous readerReport

2009-06-05 23:20:31
To the writer: damned good story, but could you put in more back story? Like why the sister decided to do this or something? Or you could write from the girls perspective! other than that It's great. keep up the good work!
@anonomous 2008-12-14 22:50:26: LOL! "wincest" eh? I like that lol!

Anonymous readerReport

2009-03-19 18:20:30
Great you have the use it.

Anonymous readerReport

2009-02-25 03:25:03
i think you have pretty good potential, you show all the right writing techniques for a novice writer, if you pursued writing in college or other ways, you could take the raw natural talent you've displayed in these stories and make it something that you could love to do for a career =) don't listen to the idiots about you having no talent, they are obviously stupid. From one writer to another, don't bring the mom into this series, or the dad, it could ruin it. but bringing in a friend of julies or a teacher at school might be a good choice if you wanted to step away from the all incest theme

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