Reviews for Drawn in Dust
DavisJes chapter 1 . 6/24/2008
This is really cool. You should write a story of how Crystal Tokyo fell.
megan chapter 1 . 11/20/2006
this one is really good. best one ive read so far.i just like the end line, its brilliant.
Usagi of Feudal Moon Era chapter 1 . 9/28/2006
WOW! You are an amazing writer. I am completely in awe of this fic. It is SO well written. I love how you wrote Venus. Very her. *standing ovation*
Richforce chapter 1 . 9/25/2006
Chibi Pyro Duo chapter 1 . 9/25/2006
Good- Very impactful. You found your character and committed to it. Congradulations. Not much action, but very good. I'm assuming it's a one-shot. I like it very much. I always enjoy getting into a characters head and trying to figure out what they are thinking. You also had great emotional description and physical descrption. It was just the right length for a piece of this nature.

Improve- I didn't know where we were. Does that sound weird? I got it at the end that we had travlled to what was Crystal Tokyo, but I still didn't understand what had lead up to these events. Maybe a bit more back plot. That is probally just me, because I can't imagine trying to add a backplot to this and making the fic as impactful as it was.

Duo "Where did all the pretty flames go?"