that you will give us a little more than this. ‘subtle’ is all very well, but i feel you are being just a little too subtle here.
for example, we don’t get jack’s final reaction. yes, he knows harry knows, but what then? what expressions cross his face? how does his body language change? when harry watches the man ‘for a moment longer’, what does he see?
this is the big pay-off for the reader – they have been wondering and wondering who the killer is, and now they want a good look at him. a chance of understanding why all this has happened.
i love harry as a character and i love 