|Reviews for the love is gone|
| beti213 chapter 1 . 7/19/2007
I'm not sure I get this one, honestly, but it's an interesting portrait. love the bolded x/y and the double parens in the second to last line-they help to make the gender/sexual tensions in this piece visual. playful and creepy; this is written like a poisoned childhood. great job.
| Holly Rose E chapter 1 . 4/13/2007
i have a fetish for incest stories, but shh, that's my own .secret. this reads like a gritty, yet elegant, porno. "a daddy loved me / complexion:" *le sigh* i think this is utterly, beautifully, catastrophic. man.
| X.xPrincess.Midnightx.X chapter 1 . 2/16/2007
I like how you portray an eerie sense to this poem. It not bad, really. I enjoyed reading this. Keep it up, as always.
| thestonedfox chapter 1 . 1/6/2007
This is one of the few times when I've really liked the way an author used fancy formatting. It really works.
And I loved how "daddy loved me" became "daddy raped me and i liked it." So childlike and eerie.
| Eloquent-Marionette chapter 1 . 1/1/2007
this poem is disturbing and sad yet, it has a hint of something familiar that i can't explain. it sort of draws me to it. the attitude and the words go hand in hand to make it so sick that you can't look away. you described it perfectly "disturbingly appealing". i don't know how you can pull it off. most people can't. that last line hits you powerfully, though. "daddy raped me and i liked it" well done with this poem. keep writing forever and always!
| bread and circuses chapter 1 . 12/28/2006
I like how it's so fragmented. "fair(y) face, connect the dots/ to make the silhouettes." That's my favourite part. I love the word silhouette. Interesting perspective, interesting poem.
| oxytocin chapter 1 . 12/24/2006
You're right - this is disturbing! I like the way you put the last lines in italics for emphasis. You have a really nice way of setting it out.
| poetic abortion chapter 1 . 12/18/2006
I love it.
Possibly because your styling in this is genius.
Honest to God, this is the most visually appealing poem that I have ever read in a long, long time, and it was just so beautiful.
Oh: "daddy raped me and i liked it" [shiver] So. Creepy.
Like, really, really creepy.
And, um, I think I want to read this always.
| Aquafied chapter 1 . 12/17/2006
it is kind of sick
in that sad way.
| no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 12/15/2006
Wow. Youch. The last line says it all. I think "(sexy/sexy without a conscience)" is really interesting, too. It does seem like there could be more to this, but it's a decent poem as it is. Keep writing! :)
| twenty-second seduction chapter 1 . 12/12/2006
i love the format.
| dollface and her cancer chapter 1 . 12/12/2006
"she utters mischief at men".
for some reason, that's the line
that pulls it together for me. i won't lie.
i'm not sure if i like it. but i'm caught by it. && that, in itself, is a purpose.
| Aneliz Rei chapter 1 . 12/11/2006
I agree with your verdict of distirbingly appealing. Fascinating piece, really.
| i'll ask the stars above chapter 1 . 12/10/2006
it reminds me of a self-injury picture i once saw, 'daddy fucked me and i liked it', which a fantastic artist re-did. i always liked the concept behind it (i dislike saying it that way), and i think that this is fantastic. it shows two different sides, two very true sides.