If you're visiting today, I've posted the first page of my ms. Feel free to read it and critique it (help it to improve) before it tries to hook a teen!
Here's the first 249 words:
“Seriously, Shelby Honey, you could put on a little more make-up. You look pale.” Mom held the steering wheel with one hand and grabbed her purse with the other. She plopped the large leather bag on my lap. “I know I have several shades of blush in there. Help yourself.”
I glared at the purse for a moment before setting it at my feet. I’d rather be home cleaning the toilet bowl with my toothbrush or ripping out my fingernails than primping in the car on the way to a basketball game. “You didn’t have to drive me, Mom. You’ll be late.”
She glanced at the clock. “It’s only two minutes out of my way. Besides, it was nice of Ashleigh to call and invite you.”
I rolled my eyes. Yes, how nice of Ashleigh to call me at the last minute.
“You should be a little more grateful.”
Whatever. Ashleigh knew I wouldn’t want to go. She should have realized my mom would jump at the chance for me to be social. Of course, that would have required Ash to put more than one thought together at a time. A little too complicated for my “best” friend.
“I don’t know why you gave her such a hard time about going.”
I sighed and tapped my fingers on the door handle. “I don’t know, either, Mom.”
“You’ll have a blast, I’m sure.”
“Yeah.” I counted the houses that passed outside my window. Mom had gushed over Ashleigh for years.