QUESTION: Fix punctuation: Then the lust when it has conceived bears sin and the sin when it is full grown brings forth death
ANS: Then the lust, when it has conceived, bears sin; and the sin, when it is full grown, brings forth death.

QUESTION: Fix punctuation: While comprehensive localization is often preferable straightforward translation will sometimes suffice
ANS: While comprehensive localization is often preferable, straightforward translation will sometimes suffice.

QUESTION: Fix punctuation: The feast was also filled with many special features that will live on in the memories of those who were present in Hamar as well as the thousands who followed along via broadcasts all over the world
ANS: The feast was also filled with many special features that will live on in the memories of those who were present in Hamar, as well as the thousands who followed along via broadcasts all over the world.

QUESTION: Fix punctuation: dynamic working environment and professional in a multinational company
ANS:
-dynamic working environment and professional in a multinational company.