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For the initial incident commander and command post location, see Jules Naudet and Gedeon Naudet, video footage, Sept. 11, 2001; FDNY interview 4, Chief (Jan. For the transfer of incident command, see FDNY interview 15, Chief (Jan.
For the initial post location, see Naudet and Naudet, video footage, Sept. 11, 2001; FDNY interview 4, Chief (Jan. For the transfer of command, see interview 15, Chief (Jan.

Yes, the story in Lemann is well researched, indeed impressively so, but the issues are left hanging without sustained analysis, which would have been possible.
the story is well researched, indeed impressively so, but the issues are left hanging without sustained analysise.

Writing containing such labored figures makes for hard reading. I am interested in what Safire has to say about language but find myself stymied: I get the feeling that he has deliberately created a minefield of interruptions in thought through which I must pick my way to the end.

I am interested in what Safire has to say, but I feel that he has deliberately created a minefield of interruptions in thought that makes for hard reading.

