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Review:CambAngst says:
Hello, again!

I thought you did a good job of conveying the awkward tension between Brienne and her father at the start of this chapter. He's trying so hard to maintain her sense of normality, but not really succeeding at all. I feel badly for her. She's learned all of these terrible things and she really needs to know more about what's going on so she can take care of herself. The parallel to the way that Dumbledore treats Harry during the first five books was really noticeable. I wasn't familiar with the expression "pulling crankers", so I hope you can tell me what it means in your response.

When she says goodbye to him in King's Cross, it was a really sweet moment. Not overdone, just what it needed to be.

Amy and Paisley seemed like good company for the journey back. It was odd that Nyx didn't seem to like Amy, but maybe I'm just reading too much into that comment. I loved these two lines:

"What did you get?"

A death threat. "Oh, some books. I loved the one you sent me."

Ha! Lee is trying to win Paisley's affections with love potions? Seems like a typical trick for him.

It's really nice, the way that the train ride eases her right back into the mood for school. By the time she arrives, she's feeling better and not apprehensive. It was a smooth transition from the horrible fear and anxiety of the previous chapter. And Fred and George are back! Let's see what sort of hijinks ensue.

This was very well written. No typos or grammar problems that I could see. Until next time!

Author's Response: Hi again!

"Pulling crackers" means the christmas crackers you can get- you know the paper ones that have toys and jokes inside? I hope you guys have them on the other side of the pond xD

I'm really glad you like this chapter :) It's mostly filler, just transitional. I'm glad you liked it, thank you for reviewing ;)

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