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Review:Ashling586 says:
I like the idea behind this one shot, however I thought that it was a bit rushed. You could easily probably turn this into a short story of three or four chapters, expanding on the memories a bit to show more of the human side of Tom. At the same time I kinda of like it just the way it is. I felt that the flow was nice, even though it was a bit rushed as well. I love the devil was once an angel line, so true and very classic. I wish I knew why there was such a big deal about her name, that she was lying about her name, when her file never says anything about being married. You might want to try and make that a bit more clear.
Overall, good job.

Author's Response: Hi again!
A short story you say? Hm, I can see why you think that but I've never been for writing short stories (it's either a one-shot or a novella) but thanks :D I'll take that into consideration next time I write a story like this.

The 'deal' about her name was that legally she was Minerva McGonagall but she secretly married (eloped) to Tom (as it says in the story) and as such, she is supposed to be known as Mrs. Minerva Riddle, but then he died she became a widow (unbeknown to everyone else). Sorry if that wasn't made clear.

The reason I made this a one-shot instead and didn't expand in this story (which is what I normally did) is because this story is very biased, being told from Minerva's POV, and she only showed the memories she dubbed important.

Thanks for the review anyway, it was very insightful and helpful :)

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