My first fictionpress poem- please review and read it (of course) I got my inspiration when I saw a person crossing the street at the mall

Water Falls

An old woman

Or is she a girl

Old face, made up

Young body, with thin legs

Sits in a chair

Rolling across the street

Pushed by her daughter

Or is it her mother?

Her feet walking

As if she could move herself

One foot, in a white sock

The other, a blue sandal

The woman stops walking

Her feet clenching into the air

Stops moving

Her daughter laughs


The man across the street

Waters his plants

The water falls off the side walk

A swift flow, leaving the parched soil

As life leaves the woman