Scp-Re-Spawn is up for grabs Posts in the discussion thread "Scp-Re-Spawn is up for grabs" - This scp is not being worked on anymore ive given up, if anyone wants the idea they can ask me. Mon, 30 Mar 2020 23:24:25 +0000 Re: My First Scp, SCP-3085 "Re-Spawn" Fri, 02 Jun 2017 18:18:58 +0000 Mortimer Tate 2045281 I mean, you tried.

]]> Re: My First Scp, SCP-3085 "Re-Spawn" Fri, 02 Jun 2017 16:39:37 +0000 Rhynair 2872361 This scp will most likely never be worked on again. end of story. i might come back to it in a year or two but scp-3085 is gone

]]> Re: My First Scp, SCP-3085 "Re-Spawn" Fri, 02 Jun 2017 13:36:11 +0000 JumpingCactus 3158915 I think this has some great opportunity. Dankaar could describe what you need to fix far better than I can, but I want to propose some questions that you could answer that would make the article far more interesting.

Why are the people who found it to be put in prison for a life sentence? Does the orb have any side effects (other than, you know, bringing people back from the dead)? Why should we be wary about Re-Spawn?

I think that if you answer these questions, and work on your grammar and clinical tone a bit, you could have a pretty decent article.

]]> Re: My First Scp, SCP-3085 "Re-Spawn" Thu, 01 Jun 2017 21:34:59 +0000 dankaar 1790336 General Problems:

  • Image is formatted incorrectly. The proper format can be found in How to Write an SCP.
  • Title in SCP. Again, this has no place in an article.
  • Lack of Story/Significance: This is still a thing what does a thing.


There is still no story or significance to the SCP itself1. It is still ultimately a thing what does a thing. You're still saying that the D-class it is in still needs to be shot instead if nonlethally taken down, (and that it needs to be in a D-class instead of, you know, in a safe and not implanted in anyone) instead. You still have the codename/title of the SCP in there when it shouldn't be in there, period.

As last time, this draft is nowhere near viable. I urge you to scrap the draft and save the idea for later.

I also urge you to not attempt to rewrite this draft until you've been reading up on series II, III, and IV SCPs for at least two days. And not before you have a clear picture of what the SCP does and know what story you want to be telling with it. And no, "a story about an invulnerability orb" does not count as one. That's a description.

And when you read those SCPs, focus on what happens, not just on what the object is. Think about what's going on in them instead of just reading them. And read the discussions to see what others had to say about it. The purpose of this is for you to see how SCPs are used to tell stories, and ideally gain some insight as to how to do the same. If you don't read 'em, it's going to be difficult to effectively write them.

]]> Re: My First Scp, SCP-3085 "Re-Spawn" Thu, 01 Jun 2017 16:37:40 +0000 Rhynair 2872361 I've remade most of the story about this SCP, I need some reviews of this new draft. Please and thank you.

]]> Re: My First Scp, SCP-3085 "Re-Spawn" Wed, 31 May 2017 23:38:41 +0000 Rhynair 2872361 this is great feed back i will scrap it and rewrite it.

]]> Re: My First Scp, SCP-3085 "Re-Spawn" Wed, 31 May 2017 23:19:30 +0000 dankaar 1790336 General Problems:

  • Off-format for no good reason. Proper format can be found in How to Write an SCP.
  • Title in Article: SCPs are almost never referred to by their titles/codenames.
  • Use of non-metric units: we use Metric here. That means meters, grams, and liters.
  • Nonclinical tone
  • Improper handling of SCP: Nothing the Foundation did in response to the SCP makes sense.
  • Lack of story/significance: You fail to get people to care about the fact the SCP exists.


Scrap the draft, keep the idea on the back burner for a time when you can properly execute it. The draft is so far from where it needs to be that you are basically better off starting again from scratch than trying to fix what you have now.

That's how much rewriting and effort its gonna take.

Although I briefly touched on it, you have constant issues with clinical tone. In short, it means stating things as clearly and consicely as possible without ysing slang, turns of phrase, or subjective words. This essay goes into greater detail; it may help if you read it.

Another thing to remember is that most modern SCPs aren't just reports on objects, but stories in the form of reports on objects. They go beyond what an object is, and examine how it impacts the world around it, how people respond to it, and/or the forces and reasons behind its creation. They aren't just some random object that has weird properties; that's only what they are on the surface.

To see what I'm talking about, I suggest you read more Series II, III, and IV articles, and focus not on what the SCP is, but what happens over the course of the article. How does the SCP impact the world? What is the response from others? Why was it created?

]]> My First Scp, SCP-3085 Wed, 31 May 2017 20:46:29 +0000 Rhynair 2872361 Here is is:

Also i know its off formant its a older version i lost the new one
and its a very ref draft.