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Analysis of the Haiku structure

overnight snow
his side of the bed

(neige de la nuit
son côté du lit

Debbi Antebi, UK
cco 2019-02-2


Difficulté de la traduction d'un haïku aussi fragile, dont la force repose sur le choix des mots impossible à rendre en traduction. C'est aussi un haïku avec un discours superficiel (neige, lit) et un niveau profond beaucoup plus difficile à saisir dans ce cas. La force de ce haïku réside justement dans l'incertitude sur le discours profond. A étudier.


morning snow bed loneliness

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* meteo - Meteo used to create an atmosphere.
Use in a haiku segment of a reference to the weather (weather conditions) that provides more than just the mention of the weather as a background. The reference refers to a state of weather that has physical (cold rain, sudden hail, frost,...) or psychological (overcast sky, storm warning, sultry afternoon...) effects. These effects are mainly felt through the skin (contact, temperature,...); which connects the author/reader to the World (his direct environment).

The mentioned weather and its effects share a set of semes (brutality, unpredictability, "cold", psychologically oppressive climate,...) with the situation experienced by the author.

A sudden and unpleasant change of situation shares semes (brutality, unpredictability, impact) with a sudden storm, hail, cold rain. A hard time to live, a disappointment, with a cold rain. An overcast weather before the rain shares with a moment when we fear the occurrence of events that we fear.

Although the meteo is often used as a marker (kigo - word of season), it sometimes brings more than just the place in the season or the context of the moment.

* simili - Similitudes.


* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

* court-metrage - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.



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Archetypes and dialectics

* D_IntExt - In <> Out.

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