[ PI ] WE SLEEP WHEN YOU ARE ALL DEAD – MarContest - 10885

You did a great job at creating your characters and building palpable suspense. You have a very unique writing style that fit the tone of the story well. I almost got a Mad Max vibe from Luca as he interrogated the stowaways on Hermes. Really an engaging read. You're story was about an average length for this competition, but I burned through it quicker than most. It really held my attention. 
 
 My only qualm was the pacing, which seemed to rush past certain events and focus on others. If you plan on continuing this story post-contest ( which I hope you do since this was only part 1 ) I'd recommend going back and fleshing out the world of the living in the outposts and Luca's journey. Besides that you had some minor grammatical errors, but so does everyone else so it's easy to overlook. 
 
 All in all this was a really enjoyable story I'd love to see this grow into a full fledged novel it most definitely has the potential.
