[ CC ] [ PI ] C764 ~ would really appreciate some crit for this piece .

I find it a bit difficult to envision the setting. I know it's complicated, but my brain just is n't putting together a good image of what it looks like. It seems like, later in the story, you're describing structures, which does n't jibe with the concept of cages in my mind. Also, where did the building materials come from? 
 
 I'm also a bit spotty on the concept of Guilds. What are they? Where did they come from? How many are there? Is everyone in a Guild, or only some people? Do Guilds define the social structure of the caged society? 
 
 The Shadow is mentioned at the beginning, but kind of falls away after that. Was this intentional, indicating the people are left to their own devices? Maybe you could work the Shadow into a religion or cult of sorts, like some people actually think of him as the `` Great Provider'' or something. 
 
 Finally, I think overall it's a bit too technical. I get the feeling you want to explain everything from the get-go, but there's more than one way to skin a cat. I think if you're trying to tell a story, then do that. Let the details of the setting reveal themselves through dialogue and descriptions, gradually and organically. Having a pile of exposition right at the beginning is kind of off-putting, makes me feel like I'm reading a technical manual instead of a story with plot and characters. 
 
 I like the idea though. You should definitely keep at it, but I really suggest you focus on a story and keep the setting in the background where it belongs.
