[ PI ] The Delicate Wasteland of the Brain - FEB CONTEST

So, this was pretty awesome. I like a lot of what you've done -- telling the same basic sequence of actions over and over again, Groundhog-Day-style, but with Hana's thoughts about and reactions to each small change. It could have gotten stale fast, but you kept it fresh. 
 
 My two first-pass criticisms: first, was the Devil's Eye called the Demon's Stone in an early draft? Because the second term comes up once that I noticed, and it seemed like you meant the Eye. Small thing. 
 
 Second, and bigger, is that the explanation of what was happening at the end felt a little forced, a little rushed. I know how hard it is to get endings right ( I spent more time rewriting mine than any other section ) and while the explanation makes sense, it's also given so fast and laid out so neatly that I felt a little cheated. Maybe spend a little more time on Hana's thoughts as she realizes what was really going on?
