[ CC ] Humans have discovered how to live forever , allowing them to die when they feel ready to do so . But it is considered bad form to live for too long . You have lingered much longer than is polite and those around you are trying to convince you to die .

I think it was Stephen King who said that if you ask 10 people to review your work and they all come back with different critiques, that your work is fine. However, if more than a few of them complain about the same thing, that's when you should take note. So consider that if I end up being the only critic for this work ( I do n't know who insta-downvotes a CC; that is messed up ). 
 
 There's no narrative reason why this story had to be first-person. Or to be fair, there's little narrative reason. During the first half when there were paragraphs of overly dramatic text between a just a few words of undescriptive dialogue, I thought the main point of the story was going to be how the character overthinks everything. But it did n't do anything with that concept in the end. So I feel there was no reason for the story to be first-person other than because the prompt happened to be written that way. 
 
 The dialogue at the start was, `` how are you doing lately?'' `` I'm fine.'' `` Good.'' `` Thank you, Nathan. How much?'' And between those four lines was a seemingly 500-word dissertation on small talk from the perspective of introverts. 
 
 And as I said, if the story were about how Max overthinks everything and lives inside his head, it would have worked well. Max would have blurted out all his thoughts, and the doctor would have said something along the lines of, `` whoa, I was just asking about your team losing the game last night.'' 
 
 But that is n't what happened, so all the extra paragraphs between the few lines of dialogue felt like word-fluff even to the end. Words of the sake of words are not good words. 
 
 Lastly, `` I did that because I knew he was staring at me,'' did n't make sense to me. Did what? Perhaps something was cut or changed, and this line was left in.
