[ PI ] Based on a prompt here , I have been writing a story over the past three months that I 've been calling `` Letters and Powers . '' Today I finished it !

I really liked this, I liked the idea that Laura won with an average power and ruthless intellect. I tend to agree that I think she got off too easy ( read: too quickly ), but yeah that's probably just a side-effect of this being so short overall. 
 
 I do n't think I've ever said this in any critique I've done, here or irl, but consider padding a few sections a bit? Hell the scene with Martin and Pyro alone could make a hypothetical action hero's career if paced right. And the silent intensity in the last scenes could rip a reader to shreds if you forced the issue. Every twitch could mean something, with Laura being one faint noise away from certain death. 
 
 If you do polish this up further, I'll be the one over here mentally fanficcing Martin surviving and hiding, Laura refusing and hiding, and another ten chosen:3
