[ CC ] Not written much before , was wondering if somebody could give me advice on how to improve on this prompt response . Thanks !

Do n't worry about the downvotes, some people just DV everything on new. Nothing against you. I'll read it, expect an edited comment when I'm done. 
 
 EDIT: Alright, a couple things I noticed. You use a lot of proper nouns, so a lot of capitalizing all over the place. For some of these it's fine, but for example: `` Gods-forsaken rock.'' `` Gods'' should n't be capitalized since it refers to any and all ambiguous gods, instead of a single `` God''. 
 
 There are a few grammar and readability issues here and there, for example. ``'A bulletin board, like, for hiring people? Sign me the hell up!' was my initial thought, after the realization of what kind of people would hire at a dodgy isolated refuelling station hit me like a lead torpedo.'' `` After'' here should be `` before'', since it does n't really make sense that our MC would think that *after* realizing what people would hire people at an isolated refueling station. Also it's `` refueling''. 
 
 That's about it. I definitely enjoyed reading it, though! If you want a little more in-depth criticism, I'd suggest you head over to /r/DestructiveReaders ( Although, you have to do the same for other people's work and they can tend to be pretty thorough, so be ready for that. ) All in all, for not writing much I though it was very good. Well done.
