[ PI ] The Delicate Wasteland of the Brain - FEB CONTEST

First of all, thank you for the criticism I received from you. I think you nailed everything on the head and since I have been stewing on improvements. 
 
 Second, I appreciated this piece quite a bit. I enjoyed how you took common character ideas and flipped them on end. You gave a Film Noir temple raid quite the upgrade in this story. 
 
 Some others have stated they found the ending confusing. I will say that I was able to follow it, but I found it a bit sparse in places, and I had to do some re-reading in order to piece together the sequences and come to the same conclusions you were leading too. I did love the detail with the shot in the back. What a great through-line. 
 
 Spectacular job, all things considered!
