[ PI ] Noir - 1stChapter - 2100 words

This was a nice read, but I have to say that after figuring out what exactly was happening in the first scene, I could appreciate just how over the top descriptive it was. 
 
 > He was a fighter. Or, rather, not just a fighter: he was a winner. And he was a survivor, but not just a survivor, but a thing to be survived. 
 
 I thought this line really accentuated who Kyle is, which made the rest of your descriptions of Kyle going forward have so much more impact. 
 
 By the end of the chapter you've really sold me on Kyle as a character, and the little mysterious tidbit about what is going to happen with the woman is a nice hook that does a good job of tying her character in to what i assume will be the latter part of your novel, ( probably after Lawman's bounty ) 
 
 Anyway congrats on making it through the first round.
