[ PI ] En Route - 1stChapter - 2392 Words

Very nice pacing. Kind of refreshing, actually. It parsed very well and it was easy to take in. Your beats work very well in how they pull you through the scene. 
 
 Some feedback: 
 
 * My main sticking point is that initial transition between past-tense and present-tense narrative near the beginning, and it could have used just a little more environmental set dressing of the road they're traveling down, so that we could picture what kind of terrain they were going into from the get-go. They're headed East, but that's very different if you start at the West coast versus the Midwest. 
 * As is often the case with first-person, also I had trouble picturing the narrator. Kady is also kind of a gender/sex-ambiguous name. So even by the end, I did n't really have any idea who the person telling the story was aside of being their reckless friend's captive audience. Nor any real clue what kind of relationship there was between them, aside of mutual shenanigans. 
 * From the way you used the house, I could have done with a few more mysterious findings throughout, observations about Donavan, etc. If the narrator does n't really know the man well, just heard of him, then it would make sense for them to try to puzzle out something about him while roaming his old burned-out house. However, in terms of actual technique, you nailed it down pretty well.
