[ CC ] Humans have discovered how to live forever , allowing them to die when they feel ready to do so . But it is considered bad form to live for too long . You have lingered much longer than is polite and those around you are trying to convince you to die .

Hey. Just giving my two cents. The writing felt like it was building up to something. But the sort of confrontation at the end was n't explosive enough. It seemed rather tepid. There did not feel like there were enough reasons for Nathan to question Max and for Max to leave the pills. There was a base for introducing conflict - the'usefulness' of a person to society, but the theme was not built on enough. 
 
 Overall I felt like there was a strong idea of a scene, but the writing did not live up to it. Hope this feedback helps your friend. Cheers: )
