[ PI ] The Monterosum Chronicles - FirstChapter - 2343 Words

*Disclaimer: I have no claim to skill, either in authoring or critiquing writing. But everyone clearly put a lot of work into their chapters, so I feel as if I must put similar effort into my review. Apologies if this is overly pretentious! * 
 
 Had a rough time getting started on this one. You've got some good turns of phrase sprinkled around, but I'm not sure what's going on until the Sunday breakfast. Then it settles down and you've got a fun cops and vampires story! 
 
 I'm not sure exactly what style you're going for. It looks like you're shooting for more of an impressionistic, loose feel to your prose, but I had a hard time following. c'est la vie. Definitely one of the more unique offerings in this group.
