[ PI ] Megafauna - FirstChapter 2344 Words

This was beautifully written! I think your descriptions were your biggest asset here. The giant fox, Kiki the fish, the nesting family of owls on the summit of the mountain, all were described in beautiful detail. The nature in your story was so easy to picture, and really enjoyable to read about. 
 
 That being said, I would focus a little more on world building. It was hard to parse out what kind of community Starling lives in, and what the rules of her world are. For example, she's building a spear and seems to live in a more primitive society, but she also has what seems to be a manufactured tea cup. Explaining the world more would make your story easier to follow. 
 
 All in all, great job! Loved your descriptions.
