[ CC ] The Psychology of Sin .

I found it well-written - but since you wanted constructive criticism, I figure I'll give it a try. 
 
 Currently, it's a very well-written fly-on-the-wall sort of tale. That's usually not a problem, but only because most stories usually introduce the characters to you and let you observe them long enough to actually become invested in them. 
 
 In this case, a completely new and unfamiliar character is brought into the scene. I have no more connection with this character than a random Joe on the subway. If I could connect with the character a bit more, then I think this would have been a horrifying tale. 
 
 But as things are, it's the story of how random Joe gets into trouble and then gets out of my life. I'm not really invested - it's interesting, even fascinating, but not heart-wrenching or particularly gripping. 
 
 Do n't get me wrong; even as it stands, it's an awesome story that I enjoyed reading. But I think what could have made it better was some sort of character development. Something to make me interested in Nathan - something to make me interested in Garrett. 
 
 That's all. Keep writing!
