[ CC ] [ PI ] C764 ~ would really appreciate some crit for this piece .

I understand how you feel about writing though mine is not near close to yours. I figured I'd give you my two cents regardless. 
 
 The only flaws I could find, I dug for it too, was only a small one, pun possibly intended. Reading at the beginning is a little tough to tell just how big these cases are. To be fair some how I missed the `` filled with tens of thousands of humans each'' part. But that being said when you were describing the cages: 
 
 `` The latch was on the top of the cage, with the nearest horizontal bar ten, maybe twelve feet up, and the vertical ones too close together for even a child to squeeze through. The cages were built as if somebody had made them for thousands of hamsters,'' 
 
 the measurement of the `` nearest horizontal bar'' immediately after the mention of the `` latch'' at the top made me think the cage was only twelve feet tall, which started confusing me when buildings entered the picture. A possible suggestion would be to say `` the horizontal bars are in twelve foot increments''? 
 
 Also describing cages that hold `` tens of thousands of humans'' as `` made for thousands of hamsters'' might make the size seem odd. 
 
 Otherwise well done, I hope I see this later on, I want to read more.
