[ CC ] I write a lot of erotica , I get a lot of compliments on it but I do n't know if people like it because the writing is good or it just turns them on . I could use some honest feedback . [ NSFW ]

First of all, this is a scene, not really a story ( since there is no plot ). That is fine for what it is. 
 
 The minutia: 
 
 1. There is no real physical description of Mistress. 
 
 2. In P3, `` pixie like'' should be hyphenated to `` pixie-like''. 
 
 3. In P4, referring to the pixie-like blonde as `` Her pray'' is a typo; it should be `` Her prey''. 
 
 4. In P7, the narrator `` bent her over the bed'', but this is not a very clear description of a sex position ( if it was meant to be ). 
 
 5. In P15, it is unclear who the speaker is. I figured out that the words are Mistress's, but it could be more clear. Also, elipses are usually three dots ``...'' rather than two. 
 
 Other than that, the scene is erotic. Obviously it will appeal to some readers more than others, but it is not bad.
