[ CC ] I wrote these stories recently here on WP , and would like to share them with my friends ; however , I feel like they could be tuned up a bit . Any thoughts on how to make improvements is greatly appreciated .

Hey, my thing is I like to describe your practice to you based on what I see. This way you get to decide whether that's what you were going for or if an audience member is completely missing the point. Pointing and saying, `` that's wrong'' leaves a bad taste in my mouth. 
 
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 You're a a teller of brick fables: fairy-tales that are meant to be told to adults and kids in 2015. There is a message in all of them but it's not vital to the enjoyment of the story. 
 
 None of it's top-heavy, you have a nice way of inviting people in by not being too complicated in your first few lines. Your characters are perfectly simple, playing with broad ideas that audiences can easily inhabit. The perfectly simple compliment can be carried over to the structure, nothing is here needlessly. You are interested how people think and the subtle way's in which they fight. 
 
 My favorite thing about you is your pullback and reveal, a lot of times when people flip the meaning of a story they are too breif or they explain too much. You give the audience exactly what they need so they can apply what happened to their own lives. That's harder to do than it looks. 
 
 You do however rely on speech for dialogue, you have a few beautiful moments where they speak via action but they are few. If I had to guess I'd say you did n't want these to have any double meanings. You are in the game of elegant storytelling and that may have gotten in the way. I do believe however you would be good at talking through action. Play with the geography, objects, wardrobe, the setting. I'd love to see what you can do with them. 
 
 After that, on dialogue. Your good at giving us a sense of who these people are in little clues. Everything I read seemed like it's something an actual human being would say, but better than that it seems like something THESE people would say. This goes back to what I said about them being perfectly simple. 
 
 Aside from that, there is nothing else I can think to say. I really enjoyed this. Be proud dude.
