[ WP ] Looking for input on my new project . Here 's a small sample . Thank you ! ! !

That's pretty good actually. 
 
 I think it's impressive the way that you tease a lot of world events, characters, races, locations, and people in a natural way. Although there are a lot of things that I do n't know about the world the flow of the narrative so far makes it easy to note these in a broad sense and still be comfortable with waiting for further development. For example, the tempest, the mage-born, helspawn, the godess, the cataclysm, a true healer. All of those are explained with enough context that I do n't lose focus on the flow of the introduction ( Stopping to read back and wonder, what the heck is this again? ) but without drowning the opening in an unending vomit of exposition. TO be fair though, I think you're close to a line. There is a lot of stuff in there that has to be brought up and further developed later. 
 
 The internal churning of the Abbess gives great characterization. Even small things like having her own set of eyes in the Duke's palace is a great line that really develops the character and is an opportunity that a lesser writer could have missed. 
 
 Sentences flow well throughout the piece, vocabulary and structure is pretty good from what I read. 
 
 I read through it straight and at the end, had peaked my curiosity enough to want to read more.
