[ PI ] PANDÆMONIUM LOST – MarContest - 11362

Hey, I read your story and while it was long, it was pretty good. Better than I was expecting we'll say. Your characterizations of Dex and Glam bordered on trope-ish but since you really stuck with it, they turned out pretty good. Your introduction to Lilith seemed kinda quick but sufficient. I wish you said what happened to all the other angels, those that did n't join the freed ones. Are they just chilling in heaven, with no work since God is taking a break? 
 
 I guess the only significant issue I had with your story was that you called it a parody of Paradise Lost ( granted, you said `` loose parody'', but still ). I've actually just finished Paradise Lost about 3 days ago, and I was expecting something very different. I was expecting the same story, retold. Same God, same Satan, same time, everything heightened but the same core story. To me, this was a completely different God and Satan, in a different setting. Yes, your story dealt with the same general theme as Paradise Lost but I would n't describe it to someone as `` a parody of Paradise Lost''. 
 
 Overall though, I was impressed with your writing and the effort you put into it. I'll keep an eye out for anything else you're writing c:
