[ CC ] LOG 4/3

Honestly, I really like your style. It's very readable and lines as short as this are really great at trying to strike a certain emotion, get in deep and personal. 
 
 Thing is, the mood you're trying to pull kinda switches on the dime, breaking immersion a little bit. That would've been the main problem here. You made more than a few choices that broke away from a certain emotion that was set in stone, which led to a `` Huh?'' moment that you really do not want in short-lined style pieces. 
 
 That's not to say you should always tell the audience what to feel. You should n't. But, when it's absolutely necessary for you to change emotions abruptly, you should always make sure there's a certain kind of build-up to the new emotion, even if it's subtle. 
 
 > And nuclear winter we had....The russians froze. 
 
 > They FROZE! 
 
 > The russians dont freeze for anything! 
 
 > But they froze to this. 
 
 > We found their weakness. 
 
 > Frozen vodka. 
 
 See, it seems like you kinda switched from trying to frighten the audience to a cheap joke for a laugh. Now, it would've made sense if there was some kind of obvious build-up or hint leading up to the joke. But not only was there not any, the joke was pretty abrupt with no real clever punchline to it or anything. 
 
 That's how it seemed to me at least, but other people do have their own senses of humor as well, so bare that in mind. 
 
 The piece also seems somewhat riddled with grammatical errors and unnecessary pauses too. I ca n't tell if that's done to fit in with the stylistic human log or not, but it's kinda sloppy to read at some points. Bad word choices that grate my eyes as well. 
 
 I'll list some examples. 
 
 1 ) 
 > Why do we do what we do realistically? 
 
 That just reads weird. The realistically is n't necessary. It reads like the narrator's trying to sound like a pseudo-intellectual prick. 
 
 2 ) 
 > Time to break out the scotch while its cold.... 
 
 > and end this bloody log! 
 
 I do n't see the point in having a pause here. It should read like one sentence. Breaking in the middle of saying something like that aloud does n't really make any sense, even for an audio log if that's what you're trying for. 
 
 Instead of pauses for dramatic effect, I would suggest one slightly longer sentence that's followed by a shorter, tone-reinforcing one. Like... 
 
 > Time to break out the scotch while its cold and end this bloody log! 
 
 > Bottoms up! 
 
 That's just my suggestion though. If you think you can find a better way of going at it, then by all means, go right ahead. It's your piece, after all. 
 
 3 ) 
 > If we had been more aware. Watched more. LISTENED PROPERLY. 
 
 I honestly really liked this sentence. Caps seemed unnecessary though given the sort of sad, depressing mood that was instilled in the lines leading up to it and following it. Italics would've served you much better.
