[ OT ] Sunday Free Write : Leave A Story , Leave A Comment - Sea to Shining Sea Edition !

Okay well here goes. I'm taking an intro to creative writing class at university for fun with a friend and this is the first story I've ever wrote. It's based on a dream I had and heavily influenced by Half-Life and They Live. I would love criticism as the paper is due in a week, and as I said this is just a beginning. Hope you guys enjoy! 
 
 It's called Run, and I suppose it would be sci-fi/suspense. Our final papers can be as long as we want, but this draft was limited to 17 pages ( double spaced, woo intro classes ). 
 
 http: //cfy.im/763/ 
 
 edit: I was just about to go to bed when I saw this post. I'll read some stories tomorrow and give any feedback I think is useful, sorry I ca n't do it tonight.
