[ PI ] The Throne of Parhelion - FEB CONTEST

Thanks for sharing, this was a solid read. I was a little distracted by the writing at first - I found it vocabulary heavy and it did n't seem natural to me. There were a few times I felt a more common word would have been the better choice. I found myself pausing a couple of times debating the merits of a particular word choice. 
 
 I also agree with heyfignuts that the story moved very rapidly in parts. I also wanted to know more about Alexander's story. How did he get transported through time? Was it divine intervention? Why on a meteor? 
 
 All that aside, it was an entertaining read. I enjoyed the concepts behind the story and thought this was a good piece. Good luck!
