[ CC ] Write a story from the perspective of a hero , but make the reader hate them in the end , or vice-versa .

When writing in the short form, it's usually better to try to stick to one scene at most. We've instead got three scenes to work with - the house being robbed, the bank robbery, and the revenge. So you end up with a laundry list of narration. Plot soup can sometimes be interesting and important - but it's mostly when doing exposition. But when your entire story becomes exposition, it becomes less emotional and feels more like it's serving a function. When you're trying to evoke emotions like hate, you really need to get up close and personal with the person to be hated.
