[ PI ] Guns of the Karlow Desert - MarContest - 17494 Words

I really did not expect to read a gun-slingin', wild western in this contest, but man you nailed it. The story is solid from start to finish, the action is exciting and feels real, and the characters really come to life. It was incredibly clever how Colt used his powers during skirmishes. The dialogue was witty and felt natural. The powers that your characters have were unique and I liked how you utilized them. It kept me wondering if there would be any new abilities introduced as the story carried on. 
 
 Overall you had a few minor grammatical errors, but so did everyone else so it's no big deal. Things got a little rushed in the end and judging by the length of the story I assume it's because you needed to wrap it up quick. I was intrigued by Marshall Morn and a little disappointed he did n't have a larger part to play. I was almost certain when he was introduced that he was the big bad guy, using his power to brush Colt and Lucile off his trail. 
 
 I feel like you really crafted a world around your story. Something that maybe one or two other stories in Group B managed to do well. Something like what you've written here can really be expanded. Good job!
