[ PI ] The Corpse Shuttle - FEB CONTEST

You do a nice job of portraying, quite viscerally, the horror that Gerald goes through. I think you could do great as a horror writer! You do a great job of portraying the madness and loneliness of Gerald. 
 
 By way of constructive criticism, I did n't really have a sense of any of the characters except for Gerald. The other names mentioned are really just names, and Tara is characterized solely by how Gerald sees her. That may be your point, given the very, very gory ending, but it was hard, as a reader, to care about what Gerald was doing. If you spent some time with Gerald, Tara and the others before it all goes horribly wrong for Gerald, it'd be that much more of a suckerpunch. 
 
 Good luck and congrats!
