[ PI ] Forgetting Memories - 2YR CONTEST ENTRY

Hi! 
 
 I think your story is interesting ( and a clever spin on the prompt! ), but the sci-fi angle comes way out of left field for me. I could n't keep up with all that new information. Consciousness transfer, software update 2010, breaking free, Cassius' son - you have an entire book's worth of twists and turns in just a few paragraphs. It went way too fast, at least for me. 
 
 That being said, I really like the idea of consciousness transfer looking like Alzheimer's, Cassius' betrayal and Emil's struggle to break free. I do think there's a great story in there. Just not a 3000-word one.
