[ PI ] Forgetting Memories - 2YR CONTEST ENTRY

The good: The first half is great! Up until the father's story part, you had my full attention. The passage where Phil said, `` I just looked at him wondering if it was worth it, he'll just forget by next week,'' and when he retells to his father his mother's death are both heartwrenching and well-written. Loved them, those were my favorite parts. 
 
 The not so good: There is too much of a tonal shift in the second half of the story when the father explains the neurochip and the surgeries. It's the shift from a heartbreaking Alzheimers tale to a sci-fi redemption tale is a stretch.
