[ OT ] Sunday Free Write : Leave A Story , Leave A Comment - Another Call for Moderators Edition

Working on a sort of experimental design of story and would love some feedback. The idea is this guy goes to live with our first alien guest- his job being to observe them and learn about them and report back. The story has two parts. The traditional story part- sorted by day. And the report part- where he focuses on an aspect of their life and does a page-long report on it. 
 
 [ This link has the first report- then the first two days of his stay ] ( http: //chapterfy.com/p/s-9f26c9d16f6f7c4327e0edffcc3634b2/ ). Read as much or little as you like or skim or however and give me any impressions you get if you would. Thank you.
