[ PI ] Yard Sale Treasures - 1ML CONTEST ENTRY

I have no clue if you're looking for CC or not, so if you would like for me to delete this, just send me a private message and I'll do so. That said, even if it may appear as if I'm shitting on your story, know that I would never waste my time giving CC to a story that is n't well written. I wo n't mention the good things you've done as there would be no point, but know that in the mere fact I'm writing this review, I believe it is a good story. 
 
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 > Xeroxed ads filled most of the telephone poles on the street. “ Yard and Garden Sale ahead, ” with arrows pointing the way. “ Zucchini and Baby Clothes, ” underneath, a sure sign of a first-time gardener who grew more squash than they could eat. 
 
 You tackled the toughest part of the restriction first. This is both good and bad. You got the X well enough for people to not realize the restriction was there, which is the goal, but the Z is a no go. Zucchini could work there, but only if it plays a role in the rest of the story. As it is, the zucchini is too random and appears unneeded. In short, it's forced. 
 
 > Any other day... 
 
 This paragraph is fine, but get rid of the word cheap in either the second or third line. The repetition makes it look like you did n't proofread the story. 
 
 > “ Very clearly, ” I replied, smiling. 
 
 This is n't realistic dialogue. Picture this scenario in your head, no way would the narrator say'very clearly.' 
 
 > “ Oh, that ’ s my Pa ’ s, ” -- - > When Pa came out... 
 
 Either get rid of the'my' from the first sentence or say'his Pa'.
