[ PI ] The Death of a Bachelor - Flashback - 1728

I think this story started out with a lot of promise, and then ended up falling off somewhere. It was a little difficult to figure out what exactly was going on and when exactly we were, and then suddenly there was a mention of cancer that was kind of out of nowhere and was never mentioned again. 
 The flashback section I think was good and showed the dynamic between the characters well. Similarly, I think the beginning of the scene was well done, and set the tone for the relationship between the two. It was just around the transition that felt a little awkward, and I feel that the relationship between the two is n't as well explored as it should have been. 
 I thought it was an interesting read nonetheless, and I hope to read more from you in the future.
